recently i wrote a poem about a guy.
this is actually the first one i have really written about any real person, other than the one about my sister.
anybody reading it would definitely find it glorifying, but an in depth reading will reveal da negative shades to it..
here it goes..
there is this guy
seen once
unseen many times
belongs to everyone
and yet to no one
you tell him sweet things.
u get sweet things doubly in return
when u say things he doesn't want to hear
u put him to sleep
all in all
he is unpenetratable
and within himself..
i challenged someone that i would write a blog with no short forms and properly punctauted. To do that i could not find something smaller to write. already i am struggling..
this is a very old poem i wrote, anyways short and sweet.
i hope atleast now there is a beginning to my post and an ending.;-)
5 comments:
hey sara,
i have been readin some of your posts..mostly poems. i thought i shud comment on them !
1: they lack depth. Try using some sort of theme. you have been mostly abt the guys u like and guys u ve met !
2: The lines seem very simple and sounds like a conversation.
aprat frm tat. its good !
-Mr.An
Nice. :)
Both the poem and the blog-post.
hey if u can come up with tat sort of a thingie...and that too a simple conversation-like poem that can reveal negative shades ? i suppose i gotta appreciate... but u dunno the meaning of entendres? i whole-heartedly believe u!! ;-)
toufiq. thanks .. atlast got yr compliment..
n bhuvanesh i really din no da meaning of entendres.. now i do.. n wil never forget it 4 life..
n mr. anonymous.. u haven read my poems i think.. i have never ever written abt any guy in my life or ppl i ve met.. jus 2 i ve written tat way.. others r mostly empathetic ones where i imagine myself to be in some one else s shoes.. ficticious characters. n i cant write anythin in depth cos my experiences r so many , but nothin deep inside..
hey this is kathik. the post is good but its not poetic.anyway it is good.best of luck...
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